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Default Another puncuation check plz thanks [urgent] - 09-20-2011, 01:00 PM

Can someone check thru this and puncuate it if i haven't and also suggest some words i can put instead of tho i may have used. Thanks

Another example of propaganda is source B7, Winston Churchill, the prime minister at the time give out multiple messages to an audience at parliament, one says who Dunkirk was won by valour and perfect discipline, and another telling us that retreat is not a victory. He uses clever words to keep support of his country and portrays Dunkirk as a success, this source is primary and is indirectly biased to Dunkirk. Churchill knows Dunkirk was a defeat but he changes the defeat to a victory by praising soldiers with bravery and honour .

All the sources mentioned above support Dunkirk to be a victory in some way, but there was a great number of the population that didn’t think Dunkirk was a victory. Source B11, an Italian cartoon named “The triumphant English retreat?” The cartoon featured a lion with a British flag tied to its tail being chased by a German soldier, the intention of this was to show that England were weak and also mocked the government for making it seemed a victory to the British population. Soon after the fall of France the Italians decided to be allied with the German’s. The source is Primary and is biased towards England.

Also agreeing to the fact that Dunkirk was a defeat, source B12, a secondary source from the BBC for the 60TH anniversary of Dunkirk in the year 2000. It says that Dunkirk was a “propaganda victory” and that “victory was plucked from defeat”. By this they mean a false impression was made by the media to keep morals high and a healthy spirit for the country. England at the time was aware that troops were evacuated, but the media in forced the evacuation was a victorious act, they did this by making what was called the spirit of Dunkirk.



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Default 09-20-2011, 02:22 PM

I have no idea what kind of citations those are, but they make it hard to read. :/

There are a couple times when your sentences are way too long and I notice a lot of places where you need to put a period instead of a comma.


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Default 09-20-2011, 02:24 PM

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I have no idea what kind of citations those are, but they make it hard to read. :/

There are a couple times when your sentences are way too long and I notice a lot of places where you need to put a period instead of a comma.
Can you point thos out to me plz ?



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hey, dude i was ganna ask you, if in shout out box is count's as post's on fourms as a requriment of modrate, correct?
No, posts in the shoutbox do not count as posts.

...and I can't tell what's your source information and what's your actually essay.


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Default 09-20-2011, 03:07 PM

I rewrote your last essay; I'm not doing it again here.
However, I can tell you that your first sentence has errors.
Check this out; It may help. http://www.informatics.sussex.ac.uk/...on/node00.html





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